almost as hard to read as some of the stories posted here…Sorry, but my suggestions are still valid. Free Porn …lolanonymous readerReport 2012-04-20 12:41:29Overall, it has some potential. And give the guy more “Alone-Time” with the girl.anonymous readerReport 2012-04-20 08:21:12Wow, really slow start! Didn’t know you could not use quotation marks in the comments. You might try using more words like “I’m” instead of “I am”, and “We’re” instead of “we are”. Too much detail on the ship, and where you went on the ship. Too much detail on the ship, and where you went on the ship. Agree with the thing to drop the background characters unless you plan to bring them into a teenage orgy in someone’s cabin.«12»
Actors:
Brandi Edwards / Jack Venice
