Sorry if that’s a bit harsh. 6 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2011-08-10 23:05:17As they say more please!!!anonymous readerReport 2010-09-15 09:35:32This is a great story!! Free Porn Sorry if that’s a bit harsh. It kind of sounds like a middle schooler is writing it a bit. And i can’t even tell whos talking half the time i can barly read this 1/10READERReport 2006-09-15 18:47:39Not bad, although you need to improve the wording and the typos in your story, that’d make it much smoother to read. Also, I like how you added paragraphs in this one, but you still had that massive chunk of an ending, Try splitting it up and adding more detail.«12» It kind of sounds like a middle schooler is writing it a bit. Sorry if that’s a bit harsh. Please tell us more.klaxxReport 2009-02-02 22:11:59″TO BE CONTINUDE” *snork*
Sounds like Engrish.READERReport 2008-02-25 19:18:18Wow terrible i cant even read it its called paraghraphs. …
